
black and smelly
like cold week old
chili that's been
left out to spoil,
I smoosh my toes
down into the guck
and watch
them vanish as they're
sucked under.
My red cork
bobs in the river,
as I occasionally tug
but forever being
outsmarted by
fish that swim
in the dark
and brackish water
of the Altamaha.
For all I know
there are eyes
of strange creatures
just beneath
the surface watching,
using a long tongue
like a windshield wiper
to wipe away
mud from the lens's
of their eyes.
My toes are
in another world
where worms
and crawling no-see-ums
squirm and wriggle
yet I feel nothing
but the muddy yuck
and coolness
against my feet.
I lift my foot.
The mud slurps
my toes,
like the first
scoop of jell-o
being spooned
from the bowl,
trying to suck them
into the underworld.
I pull in my line
and find once again
that I've been robbed,
my bait gone
and a muddy blob
of earthy muck
left in it's place
like a calling card
"We were here."
The smell of
rot and decay
wafts up
to my nostrils.
I pull my feet out
and wipe them
in the deep grass
growing thick
on the riverbank
leaving holes
in the mud where
my feet were,
slowly being refilled
by creatures below,
annoyed that once
again they'd failed
to pull in the big one
that got away.
-Lynn Hamilton Rutherford
Magnificent ~ the way you use words to conjure up vivid images .....
ReplyDeleteGreat job attacking our senses with your descriptions!
ReplyDeleteAlso, love the wording here:
"I pull in my line
and find once again
that I've been robbed,
my bait gone
and a muddy blob
of earthy muck
left in it's place
like a calling card
"We were here." "
- Dina
Wonderful-not only visual but olfactory...I can see and smell that mucky fishing hole!
ReplyDeleteHelen ... thank you! I actually borrowed this moment from my childhood! Thank you for stopping in!!!
ReplyDeleteMypoet ... haha! Thanks, that was one of those ideas that I HAD to throw in there since there is NOTHING more annoying than finding that "blob" on your hook in place of bait. How the fish do that so quickly, I'll never know! *big grin* Appreciate your comment! :)
Kath ... Thank you! I love it when we're given the opportunity to toss whimsy into our work. For me, there are few things more whimsical than trying to describe the smell of mud. haha! Love ya ... and thanks for your comment!!! :))
Lynn:
ReplyDeleteWhit and whimsy go hand and hand here in this delightful poem I can see through your words - the sun is sparkling on the dark murky water, intent on the task at hand while your toes are burrowed deep in the muck and mire squishing and squirming like a new kind of water creature.
Delightful adored reading this piece.
Have a good week end.
Joanny
How could you put your feet in such yukky muddy smelly yuk! Very very imaginative and clever use of words to make me feel that yukky yuk was real and my toes were squelching in it!
ReplyDeleteChristine
This is a winner, a keeper, one for your collection for sure.
ReplyDeleteYuck - I can feel, smell and fear the muck. And the fish missed their big catch. How cool!
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem. I too could smell the muck and the mud.
ReplyDeleteA lovely poem. I particularly liked the thought of the fish wiping their eyes!
ReplyDeleteback to a time when life was simple..... peaceful....and honest.
ReplyDeleteOkay, now I want to dust off the ole fishing pole! I love your comparison of mud to cold chili, and how your feet got sucked in...well executed piece here.
ReplyDeleteDelightful! Reminds me of a little poem from my childhood by Polly Chase Boyden called "Mud"....nobody else but the rosebush knows how nice mud feels between the toes.
ReplyDeleteI'm no fisherman, but I've enjoyed mud...and I enjoyed your poem a lot, especially the last two lines.
ReplyDeleteha. love it. i have been right there...and they did not get me either...though my feel remember that muck well. nice magpie!
ReplyDelete....no-see-ums! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteI was squishing all the way with you..so tactile..the first scoop of jello..yes!!
ReplyDeleteA delightful poem
ReplyDeleteloved the last lines
gave me the chuckles
I'm glad you escaped the sinister mud to tell the tale! Great perspective.
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