"I'll be the first one up," she said
to her chubby siblings
who quietly lay in the bed beside her ...
and silently rolled their eyes.
"You watch," she said
as the snows melted
and rain began to fall upon their earthen roof,
"I'll be first one up," she bragged again.
The sun began to warm the ground
and quietly called the sleepy heads.
"See you at the top," she called
as she stretched upwards and downwards ...
... racing her bedmates to be the first
to take a look at the world.
But they shook their heads and muttered,
"Aren't you a mid-spring flower?"
Giggling she took one last great stretch,
pushed up the earth and then popped through
just in time to look back and see
her bedmates just arriving.
"Told you I'd be first," she quipped ...
Then victoriously leaned forward,
flipped up her skirt
and flashed her yellow pantaloons.
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I was afraid she might get in trouble over late occurrences of frost! Very enjoyable.
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Spacedlaw ... haha! Thank you! I can't wait to read your offering!!!
ReplyDeleteShhh, don't tell, but "pantaloon" is one of my favorite words.
ReplyDelete@spacedlaw I agree, it almost feels like a twist at the end (that is, a non-twist when one is expected).
Lynn: always enjoy the way you find the unexpected in the everyday wonder of it all. The brilliant personification of the flowers as children is heart-warming. Yellow pantaloons! The daffodils do look like yellow pantaloons! Charming!
ReplyDeleteNothing ... I agree! ... so much that I'd love to own a pair of them!!! :))
ReplyDeleteChiccoreal ... Thank you! I appreciate that! I love love LOVE your blog and reading your stuff! And let me just say that I've found many kindred spirits at Magpie Tales! Thank for you for visiting! :))
Love that - she is a flasher -- I will never be able to look at the pretty dilly daffodils the same way any more for now I will always see her pretty yellow pantaloons.
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Lynn, you make me smile largely each time I read your words!! Absolute delight!
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That was good!
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Delightful--and cheeky (flasher!).
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ReplyDeleteDelightful, thoroughly enjoyed, very well done!
ReplyDeleteLove it - what a delight - and pantaloons are a perfect word picture of a daffodil in all its glory!
ReplyDeleteJoanny ... haha! Thank you! I've always thought they looked somewhat like a womans undergarment, but didn't really decide on the whole "Pantaloon" thing until Mag 7!! haha!
ReplyDeleteR .... thank you! Then I've succeeded. Making people smile, I think, is supposedly my "lot"! :)) I appreciate it!
Suz and Hausfrau ... well thank you!! Sometimes it amazes me what is coughed up in a big ole' pile of writers block! :D
Berowne ... *big hug* .... Thank you. I am humbled. Appreciate you for stopping in! :))
Peg ... I was torn between pantaloons and bloomers. Pantaloons won only because I felt "bloomers" seemed almost like a play on words, considering I was dealing in daffodils! haha
Splendid!
ReplyDeleteLove thinking of bulbs as fellow bedmates and the daffodil's yellow pantaloons.
ReplyDelete"flipped up her skirt and flashed her yellow pantaloons." Snarke, I had to laugh out loud at that. Loved the youthfulness. A fun poem.
ReplyDeleteI think its the 'bragged' that makes you think she's heading for a fall. Had to laugh out loud at the unexpected finale. As usual, you put a smile on my face Lynn.
ReplyDeleteMy uncles tell me I was a flasher as a little girl. No pantaloons, but I loved flipping up my dress and showing my panties to the public. Don't worry, I've outgrown the urge.
ReplyDeleteCharming piece, Lynn!!
I'm in love!! With this poem! First to say good day to springtime..Who wouldn't want to be that one?
ReplyDeleteCertainly a Flasher, why didn't I think of that! I smiled all through this one...
ReplyDeleteHow delightful! This is a perfect poem for spring.
ReplyDeleteCharming! Those daffodils are the cheeky ones, aren't they?
ReplyDeleteCatalyst ... well thank you! I appreciate your stopping by! :))
ReplyDeleteSteviewren ... when I was little I thought a "bed of flowers" meant where mom put them at night. :) Thanks for the comment!
Eric S ... every once in a while I'll do a piece that I think kids will enjoy! This was one of those ... they're so fun to write because you get to think like a kid for a little bit! :)) Thanks for the comment!
Peter ... that's sweet of you to say! I was hoping to give it a little spin that way!! :)) I appreciate your stopping in! Thank you!
Willow ... thanks! haha I had a pair of Wizard of Oz panties that I was a little bit "all too happy" to show off! Again .... yes, YEARS ago! haha
Lyn ... Awww ... thank you!! I thought it would be interesting to make a daffodil sassy, instead of sweet for a change. Somewhere in the poem she became a down-right spitfire! haha Thank you for stopping in!
Pat ... I'm glad I made you smile! If so, I'm satisfied! Thanks so much for stopping in! I appreciate it!
Angie ... thank you so much! I'm glad it wasn't a crocus we were to write about .... haha'
Vickie ... yes! The cheekiest!!! Thank you for the comment and for stopping in! :))
Wow, I never considered pantaloons as looking like a daffodil (and vice versa) but you're so right! They look exactly like them. A very humorous poem, and the 'no surprise' ending is a pretty good surprise ;)
ReplyDeletehaha...how playful and fun. wonderful magpie!
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